There is something missing though -- the humour element, the essence which I think make the readers take any work to their hearts. Isn't that the reason we love Dumbledore or Gandalf or Rhett Butler? The characters, Pinoque and Sethran, could have served this purpose. The first one, the companion figure, is apt to take the place of a Fool but is not given much role. As for Sethran, usually the communication between a father and daughter is full of repartee (even in real life) but alas! here it is not so.
The rape scene came as a shock as it was totally unexpected in a fairytale kind of novel. Yet much discomfiture is aroused from the way its effects are described as if the lady's body is scarred beyond repair. Isn't that a pre-modern notion? Is it not the man who has lost his real innocence? Freiysuira who in the story stands for God or Fate, asking the Princess to surrender to be seduced, is incredulous too. Her words reeks of masochism.
Ending is also vague. If it was a series published for a magazine, then stopping at the middle of the action would have been perfect. Here the hero has not yet realised his mission, no evil is vanquished and I felt like the character of an Italo Calvino novel -- betrayed. Still I like the book, otherwise why did I spend an evening imagining the possible outcomes?
To ease the hunger of his family, he goes to hunt in the forbidden forest of Illex, and there meets with the elven princess, Amarya. His elder brother, Drevan, considers this as treachery but when he is shot down by an elf, Amarya comes to the rescue. Far from being grateful, Drevan reports to the king and Darrion is forced to flee to the forest.
Amarya is also in trouble. She is blackmailed into accepting the hand of evil Sir Laeryen and on the day of the engagement he brutally rapes her too. A vision warns her that this is inevitable to ward off the coming disaster to her people. She must not be a distraction to Darrion, the key to Llathala's future.
You do have great potential Rachel. It is great to publish a novel at the age of 19. All the Best!